Short Story v3

In the Hills of the Suburbs

His name was Kevin. That was about all he knew, except that he felt very alone standing in the main thoroughfare of Hillcrest, watching the neat tract houses stretch into infinity.

The afternoon was very late, though Kevin could not say exactly what time it was. He did not own a watch. But the quality of light told him it was late afternoon. The sun lay behind blue veins of clouds from which hard, dry snowflakes broke against the frozen ground. A biting wind gathered the flakes into dusty whirls that swirled across the road in Hillcrest. Kevin expected to see tumbleweeds bounce across the empty yards.

He stood at the center of the street, his hands hanging at his sides, and stared at the rows of houses.

Cars sat idle in the ice-glazed driveways, twists of bruised snow arching from the tires to the asphalt. A sled was propped against the wall of one house, next to the front door. A mailbox door lay open, the flag up, a manila envelope jutting from inside. A spigot was encased in a multipetaled bloom of ice. A child’s tricycle lay over-turned in another yard, the back wheels hidden in a patch of snow.

And there was the quiet. Not the respectful quiet of a library, nor the funeral silence of a ritual. This was the implacable shock of a catastrophe, the moment of numbness that always divides the brain from awareness and acceptance, and the crippling pain that follows. It was the quiet that had summoned Kevin from his hideout beneath the concrete bridge that spanned the river. The river circled Hillcrest like a moat, drawing a line between it and the city that waited beyond the infinite tract of houses. Kevin lived under the bridge, belonging to neither world, and came out only to scrounge the dumpsters or hide from bored cops looking to provoke a few bums.

Except the cops had not come today. And Kevin, after daring to light a fire with wood he’d taken from a nearby construction project, had finally noticed that no cars were crossing the bridge. The world was as silent as the day it had been born.

Empty, he thought, staring at the houses. They were empty. No lights burned within. No irate men shoveled sidewalks as their perfectly healthy kids played nearby. No two-career housewives scattered sand on the driveway so they could pick up the children from swimming practice, return home in time to throw something together for dinner, then spend the next three hours grading papers while their husbands hammered at computers until midnight.

Kevin had never been part of that world. He neither envied nor pitied the people who were. But he was curious. Because now the houses were empty.

And he did not know where the people had gone.

He walked absently down the street. A front door stood open, flapping idly in the wind. A plastic garbage can traced aimless semi-circles on the sidewalk. Kevin walked to the very heart of Hillcrest, and it was the same, everywhere.

Emptiness. Abandonment. Silence.

These people who had everything they could reasonably want: Where had they gone?

Kevin stopped at the center of a cul-de-sac. The sky was growing darker. The clouds still shed brittle flecks of snow. He was surrounded by houses, and the wind could not get in here as readily, which lent a cathedral calm to the setting. The houses stood in sharp contrast to the horizon, where a streak of light leaked through the overcast.

In the yard directly in front of him: lawn ornaments. Frozen flamingos. Plaster cast fawns and bunnies and masked raccoons. Leaning against one another at crazy, off-kilter angles. Their expressions of joy and innocence distorted by crusts of ice and dirty snow.

They looked sullen and angry.

Kevin thought of the rats he had seen, hiding in culverts. Sometimes they would turn on themselves, as if all of them, in a single, defining moment, had witnessed some bleak revelation about the indifference of life. So they would kill each other, a final act of defiance. And then the water would wash their bodies away.

Kevin turned from the houses and faced the sky and thought of everything he had, and everything he was. But, it had always been enough, he told himself. It had always been enough.

Snow wheezed across the empty streets as the neat tract houses stretched into infinity.

The silence. The emptiness. And Kevin. No longer alone.

"Nomination"

I guess I'll just nominate my 10 min play... That still doesn't seem 10 minutes long. I think my short story might make a better nomination but I haven't got feedback on it yet. It's right after this one go on and tell me what you hate about it.

The scene opens upon two people waiting to be seated at some restaurant that I haven’t taken the time to name.

GARY

Hi we’d like a table.

HOSTESS

For how many?

GARY

Just two.

HOSTESS

What name?

GARY

Reina.

REINA

Why my name?

GARY

Why not?

REINA

Well played.

HOSTESS

A table should be ready in a few minutes.

REINA

Okay, thanks.

[GARY and REINA walk over to a nearby bench (or table or something sitable at) and sit down]

REINA

I’m surprised that this place isn’t all that busy. I mean it’s a Saturday there should be way more people.

GARY

Yeah, I figured there would be more. Good thing there’s not, I’m starving.

REINA

You’re always starving.

GARY

Girl, I will knock you out.

REINA

I’d like to see you try.

GARY

[Under his breath] So would I.

REINA

What!?

GARY

Nothing!

REINA

You are so lame.

HOSTESS

[Over a speaker] Michael, party of 3, your table is ready.

GARY & REINA

[Sad] Aww…

[REINA’s phone rings playing “Still Alive Radio Remix”]

GARY

NERD!

REINA

[Holding the phone up to her ear] You recognize the song so I’m a nerd.

GARY

Yup.

REINA

[Answering the phone] Talk to me Goose. Oh we’re just at [insert restaurant name here]. Yeah, no it’s not busy at all. No we still haven’t gotten a table yet. I’m not doing that to the hostess. I don’t care if you think it’s hilarious I won’t. Of course I it’s hilarious but I won’t. Okay that’s cool. No we’d love to. Alright, bye then.

GARY

Who was that? One of your many lovers I presume?

REINA

No! It was Cherry. She said she might stop by on her way to her friend’s house.

GARY

I don’t care.

REINA

[sighing] Neither do I.

GARY

[Pauses Shortly] Your friend has a stripper name.

REINA

Yes. Yes she does.

HOSTESS

[Over a speaker] Crystal party of 3 your table is ready.

GARY

[Short chuckle]Stripper name.

REINA

Shut up.

GARY

So why do we come here every Saturday?

REINA

Because we’re all supposed to meet here and reminisce.

GARY

That’s right, ALL of us. SOMEBODY didn’t want to come AGAIN.

REINA

I know he’s not here again.

GARY

He says he always has to work Saturdays now even though he knows we use this day to meet here.

REINA

Well his new job calls for it apparently. He can’t just hang out with us on Saturdays like he used to.

GARY

That’s a terrible excuse.

REINA

Are you high?

GARY

On life, Reina. On life.

REINA

You’re an idiot.

GARY

[Sassy] Mmmhmm.

REINA

Why are you always harping on him?

GARY

Because he sucks!

REINA

You don’t mean that!

GARY

Yes I do, He never hangs out with us anymore.

HOSTESS

[Over a speaker] Terry, party of 6, your table is ready.

GARY

Oh, come on!

REINA

Seriously why do you hate him so much recently?

GARY

I dunno, maybe just because I feel like it.

REINA

Oh come on you have to have a better reason than that

GARY

Well, fine you wanna know what’s got me pissed off? We used to spend so much time together and have done so much for him and now he won’t even give us the time of day. We helped him when he was failing Geometry in high school. When he wanted a girlfriend we set him up with that one girl, uh the one, well you know! When his dog died we were both there for him. Seriously, we even helped him get his job back! OKAY, I’m done ranting now.

REINA

You call that a rant!? That blowed!

GARY

WHAT?

REINA

First of all you should probably get some of your details right before you go off about someone.

GARY

Care to explain?

REINA

Gladly. I don’t know if you noticed but he’s also done a lot for us in return. When he was failing Geometry we made him give us his lunch money until he didn’t need our help.

GARY

Oh yeah, I forgot we did that.

REINA

When we found him a girlfriend you literally went to the nearest girl and asked her if she wanted a “free meal”. But before you let him go out with her you made him call you “Dr. Love” for a week.

GARY

Holy shit, I forgot about that! THAT, was a good week.

REINA

What was the next thing you said we did?

GARY

His dog died.

REINA

That’s right! We weren’t there for him. In fact we were both gone when it happened. You were visiting your parents and I was, well that was around the time I discovered tequila… So everything from around then is a little, iffy.

HOSTESS

[Over a speaker] Karen, party of 5, your table’s ready.

GARY

SERIOUSLY!? This place is NOT that busy where are these people coming from!?

REINA

Yeah I’m not sure, I don’t even see half these people... Where were we?

GARY

Uhh… Got his job back!

REINA

Oh yeah! No… No, we didn’t in fact we made sure that he would never get near that building again.

GARY

Say what!?

REINA

[Confused] I don’t know how you managed to forget what happened we weren’t exactly quiet when we got thrown out. We only tied up the secretary to the bathroom sink. How else were we supposed to get into the President’s office!? Anyway, after they found out what had happened—And I still don’t know how that secretary got loose we tied those knots pretty tight—Well once she got loose it was all over for us and him. Jared and I just rolled down the stairs when they threw us out—And I mean that literally, that guard was REALLY strong—NOW I REMEMBER! When he threw you out you stumbled and flipped over the railing! I didn’t see you land, but when we pulled you up you said you were fine… We went out for a drink and didn’t see you again for a while.

GARY

Yeah I don’t really—I don’t remember that week, like, at all. Wait, but I do remember him going to work after I started remembering things again.

REINA

Well he managed to get a job really quick I don’t know where it is and he won’t tell me. In fact that was about when he stopped hanging out with us.

GARY

So, uh. We’re kind of terrible friends aren’t we?

REINA

Yeah. Yeah I would say so.

GARY

[Sincerely] At least we have each other.

REINA

Yeah…

GARY

I hate you.

REINA

I hate you too.

[Lights fade out]

HOSTESS

[Over a speaker] Reina, party of 2, your table’s ready…Hello?

[It’s over!]


Short Story v2

In the Hills of the Suburbs

His name was Kevin. That was about all he knew, except that he felt very alone standing in the main thoroughfare of Hillside Manor, watching the neat tract houses stretch into infinity.

The afternoon was very late, though Kevin could not say exactly what time it was. He did not own a watch. But the quality of light told him it was late afternoon. The sun lay behind blue veins of clouds from which hard, dry snowflakes broke against the frozen ground. A biting wind gathered the flakes into dusty whirls that swirled across the road in Hillside Manor. Kevin expected to see tumbleweeds bounce across the empty yards.

He stood at the center of the street, his hands hanging at his sides, and stared.

Cars sat Idle in the ice-glazed driveways, twists of bruised snow arching from the tires to the asphalt. A sled was propped against the wall of one house, next to the front door. A mailbox door lay open, the flag up, a manila envelope jutting from inside. A spigot encased in a multipetaled bloom of ice. A child’s tricycle lay over-turned in another yard, the back wheels hidden in a patch of snow.

And there was the quiet. Not the respectful quiet of a library, nor the funeral silence of a ritual. This was the implacable shock of a catastrophe, the moment of numbness that always divides the brain from awareness and acceptance, and the crippling pain that follows. It was the quiet that had summoned Kevin from his hideout beneath the concrete bridge that spanned the river. The river circled Hillside Manor like a moat, drawing a line between it and the city that waited beyond the infinite tract of houses. Kevin lived under the bridge, belonging to neither world, and came out only to scrounge the dumpsters or hide from bored cops looking to provoke a few bums.

Except the cops had not come today. And Kevin, after daring to light a fire with wood he’d taken from a nearby construction project, had finally noticed that no cars were crossing the bridge. The world was as silent as the day it had been born.

Empty, he thought, staring at the houses. They were empty. No lights burned within. No irate men shoveled sidewalks as their perfectly healthy kids played nearby. No two-career housewives scattered sand on the driveway so they could pick up the children from swimming practice, return home in time to throw something together for dinner, then spend the next three hours grading papers while their husbands hammered at computers until midnight.

Kevin had never been part of that world. He neither envied nor pitied the people who were. But he was curious. Because now the houses were empty.

And he did not know where the people had gone.

He walked absently down the street. A front door stood open, flapping idly in the wind. A plastic garbage can traced aimless semi-circles on the sidewalk. Kevin walked to the very heart of Hillside Manor, and it was the same, everywhere.

Emptiness. Abandonment. Silence.

These people who had everything they could reasonably want: Where had they gone?

Kevin stopped at the center of a cul-de-sac. The sky was growing darker. The clouds still shed brittle flecks of snow. He was surrounded by houses, and the wind could not get in here as readily, which lent a cathedral calm to the setting. The houses stood in sharp contrast to the horizon, where a streak of light leaked through the overcast.

In the yard directly in front of him: lawn ornaments. Frozen flamingos. Plaster cast fawns and bunnies and masked raccoons. Leaning against one another at crazy, off-kilter angles. Their expressions of joy and innocence distorted by crusts of ice and dirty snow.

They looked sullen and angry.

Kevin thought of the rats he had seen, hiding in culverts. Sometimes they would turn on themselves, as if all of them, in a single, defining moment, had witnessed some bleak revelation about the indifference of life. So they would kill each other, a final act of defiance. And then the water would wash their bodies away.

Kevin turned from the houses and faced the sky and thought of everything he had, and everything he was. It had always been enough, he told himself. It had always been enough.

Snow wheezed across the empty streets as the neat tract houses stretched into infinity.

The silence. The emptiness. And Kevin. No longer alone.