A Time My World Changed v1
"Start"
There’s a dull droning voice in the background
making it hard to concentrate
going on and on about some problem it has.
So I sit quietly in my desk listening to nothing.
Pencil touching paper, but nothing happening.
The voice get’s louder to summon everyone’s attention.
I don’t care.
I decided to start
something I should have done a long time ago and wish I had.
The things that concerned the voice were not for me.
All of it’s problems
seemed so pointless.
I knew what I wanted to do.
So I did.
--I kind of already know what's wrong with it and what I want to change. If you want to chime in about something go ahead I just don't have any questions to ask.
1 comments:
Well i know you dont really want comments but I dont really understand what the droning voice is. Initially I thought it was a teacher but the fact the teacher would be going on and on about their problems seems a little strange to me.. So then I thought it was another kid? But again I dont really understand why you are starting what it is you are starting. So maybe some clarity and an emotional appeal or response to whats happening so the reader can get an idea of whats going on for you.
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